Hello wonderful people I’m here today to discuss a topic that is not so wonderful that destroys families and communities. Terrorism is a difficult subject to talk about this is not only threatening the United States of America, but it is a worldwide threat. 911 devastated the U.S. and too many children were left without moms and dads that day. This needs to end now.
A terrorist is a person who terrorizes or frightens others. There are a substantial amount of terrorist that are native to the United States. All mass murderers are terrorists; they, for sure frighten people. We all want the United States to be more like our neighbors to the north. Canada is an unbelievably free of terrorism. People leave their doors wide open in Canada so people could walk in their homes whenever they pleased. In one county of a total of 25 years as being the sheriff he had seen a total of two murder cases. It has been said that some insane people murder several people at time to become famous. Mass murders receive an unbelievable amount attention from the news. Experts have tried to persuade news channels close to the incident to provide vital information and other channels in other parts of the country to provide bare minimum attention. This could indeed stop many mass murders because some people want to become “celebrities”. Some may say we have too many weapons however is that really the case making guns illegal would do nothing to stop violence because it’s just like drugs they’re illegal, but that doesn’t stop people from getting them it would be the same case with guns.
I have dream that one day the world will be rid of terrorists wanting to kill so many people. People should be able to work in the New York City skyscrapers, go to the mall in Oregon, go to the movies in Colorado, and even go to school in Colorado, Virginia and Connecticut . I have a dream that our children can live without fear. I have a dream!
Wow, I love how you mentioned all of the terrorist attacks in the US, but I was a little confused on the Canada part. Anyway when I was in New York over thanksgiving weekend we went to see the 9/11 memorial, sadly it was closed but, we had all been talking on the walk there and as soon as we saw the dedication to the firemen that died we all went silent. That was when I realized how much torrorism affects people everyday. People don't normally think of it but when they do they are scared. It is like the shooting at Sandy Hook. People got so scared. It affected everything. All the schools tried to help out, at swimming that was all we talked about, they stopped playing certain songs on the radio, and everyone knew what was going on. It would be fabulous if terrorism stopped but someone is always going to want to hurt someone when they get mad.
ReplyDeleteThe opening paragraph is really good and so was the last. The way you presented this was very well done as well. You added real life examples which made it relatable. I stand behind your statement about guns. Making them illegal will NOT get rid of them. Good job.
ReplyDeletePeter, I really like this article. You really brought a lot of valid points to the table which made the article better. I also like how you started your second paragraph off with the definition of a terrorist, once you did this, the audience understood more of what what a terrorist was and what they do. Couldn't a bully even be considered to be a terrorist? I'm thinking they could be because they frighten and terrorize people with their words and actions.
ReplyDeleteGood work Peter, I do agree with you that terrorism is a growing epidemic in the US. I thought your details were good but I think your opening, closing, and slightly; your grammar, but other than that it was good! I especially liked how you gave the extra fact about that Canandian county.
ReplyDeleteGood work Peter, I do agree with you that terrorism is a growing epidemic in the US. I thought your details were good but I think your opening, closing, and slightly; your grammar, but other than that it was good! I especially liked how you gave the extra fact about that Canandian county.
ReplyDeleteGood work Peter, I do agree with you that terrorism is a growing epidemic in the US. I thought your details were good but I think your opening, closing, and slightly; your grammar, but other than that it was good! I especially liked how you gave the extra fact about that Canandian county.
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